For this paper I received an unsatisfactory grade. Due to my lack of organization and confusing on the out line. This made me go back and reorganize the entire paper in order to produce a good final draft.
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Feed back from the Instructor
Hand Written Notes
I did not use these notes in my first Multi-Modal draft. Because I found them to be general and effective.
The major problem that my tutor pointed out were organization and transition. I was instructed to separate the topics between paragraphs as well as using transitions phrases to inform my reads what I would be discussing.